- What helped me stay organized?
- One thing that helped me organized is the DBQ writing template. It helped me stayed organized because it has instructions of how to write the essay. It tells me when the write the thesis, the claim, the counterclaim, and the conclusion. This time, Mr.Post removed the sentence stems, with is a little bit more challenging for me to write, but I think this is good because we are going to high school next year, and in high school, there will not be sentence stems.
2. What trouble did I have and why?
- One trouble that I’ve had during this writing is the sentence stems. Mr.Post deleted the sentence stems from the template, which is a really useful thing. Before, I can use the stems to quickly and easily write my essay, but now, I need to think by myself, I need to create my own sentence stems, which is a bit challenging to me.
During the late 1800s, the Europeans found a new continent that contains endless natural resources, Africa. To avoid war and unfairness, in 1885, the rule of occupation was created many European countries contended, and they all divided Africa evenly. No Africans were invited to the conference, even if there was one African who contended in the act, the whole forced labor in Africa might change. People in Africa were cheaply treated, they are forced by the Europeans to do task that they told them to do, and many of them were killed during this time. The one driving force behind the European imperialism is the economy. The primary driving force behind European imperialism is the economic benefit for themselves. With all of the unused and unclaimed resources in Africa, European countries compete with each other to get the most cheap resources from Africa, you might say it is the driving force is nationalism, but you will need money first for you to run a country.
To Begin with, I think the primary driving force is the economic benefit for the Europeans. Because since there are so many cheap resources in Africa, all European countries must be thinking about it and the benefit it could get them. Based on Document E, in 1854, the exports to Africa was around $2.5 million, but within 46 years, it grew to $21 million, 8 times more the amount in 1854. This evidence shows how much money the Europeans made during that time, and this is a primary driving force, no one can resist attraction from money, and with all of the money they’ve got, European countries also started the Industrial revolution. To sum up, the main driving force behind European imperialism is the economic benefit, since they are too attracted by the wealth and benefit.
It has been argued that the primary driving for is not economic benefit, instead it is for national pride. People claimed that instead of wanting more money, Europeans wants more power and land. Based on Document A, the European countries has divided Africa evenly. But of course all European countries will want more lands in Africa since with more land, they can have more cheap resources and with the resources they can use it on many things. On Doc B, John Ruskin said “That Their First aim is to be to advance the power of England by land and by sea. This shows that England wants to expand their power by advancing their power by land and sea. This evidence shows that all European countries must want to expand their power and land and this is why national pride is the primary driving force behind European imperialism. Although this argument sounds convincing, but the primary driving force is not national pride, instead it is the economic benefits. In particular, you need money to run a country, since Europeans wants to expand their power and land, they will need money first. You can have a country, but if it does not have enough money, then the country will suffer. This leads to the conclusion that money is more important than power, with more money, you will have more power. For the European countries to expand, they will need more money. After looking at both side of the issue, one can see that if you want more power, you will need more money to do so.
To summarize, the primary driving force behind European imperialism is the economic benefit, not national pride. And if you want more land, you must need more money to run it, so the economic benefit is more important than the national pride. The Europeans came to Africa and claimed as theirs’, they forced the Africans to work for them for their own benefit. If you were a European ruler, would you let your men enslave and kill Africans for your own benefit?
Reflection Questions(After rubric)
A. Bright spot A strength I showed is that I have included good background and context in my introduction. I’ve also included good counter claim in my writing.
B. To Work On One thing that I should work on is run-on sentences. In the rubric, I have multiple run-on sentences, and this makes my essay continuous and boring. Also, I did include a evidence in my writing, but it is not really strong. Maybe next time, I should take more time and find a stronger and more convincing evidence.