I believe that I can give good point and I can strengthen my writing with different techniques like this quote “Plus, everyone needs to have time to have fun with family and friends, including you.” I think that I’ve greatly improve my writing fluency because I don’t repeat the ideas or repeat words over and over in each paragraphs. I think I’ve use some techniques that we learn in Humanities class to make my writing better.
My difficulty is when I have to think of ways to convince people instead of just listing why this is not good for students. I’m also having problem with making blog post more creative instead of complaining about teacher and parents but I didn’t really try to solve this problem.
I start taking other people’s ideas and turn it in a way that it is mine. I also listen to people’s complaint.
I would have check my punctuation and word choice like instead of saying needed I suppose to change it into necessary. I would have put more effort and checking into my writing because I made lots of basic mistakes. I should have write a final draft because this writing is just my second draft.